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Review:foreverfleur says:
This is was a really cute and succinct piece. I have for some reason been reading a lot of 'portrait' pieces lately just out of coincidence and must say I enjoyed this one immensely.

I especially liked the background you gave to Peeves--what an under explored character (like Phineas himself), it was just a really nice spin. Imagining the dynamic between the two of them--what a pair they would have been!

The only thing I wish you had developed a bit more was the scene Phineas was peeking in on as he traveled from Hogwarts to Grimmauld Place--though clearly your focus was Phineas' character/perspective as a portrait, I think bringing Dumbledore and Sirius out a bit more (their characterizations/that plot line) might strengthen your characterization of Phineas, giving you a bit more to compare and contrast with.

But otherwise, great job! Makes me want to incorporate Phineas into my stories somehow!

Author's Response: Hi there!! Thank you so much for reading && reviewing :)

I am glad you found it cute and succinct :D That makes me smile. I'm happy to know you liked the Peeves' part I squeezed in there; I initially planned to write him as a separate one-shot (his life before a poltergeist) but then I didn't seem to be able to get it right, but the plot bunny just wouldn't go so I incorporated it here :D Glad you appreciated it!

About the building up of Sirius and Dumbledore, I see what you mean but I actually wrote this for a challenge and the sole focus was supposed to be on Phineas. However, If I do an edit in the future, I'll surely keep your comments in mind :D

Thanks once again for the review! I am thrilled that it inspired you to write Phineas too!!

kudos!


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