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Review:hplover987 says:
hplover987 here with your review.

Strengths
This was a truely beautiful chapter. Most Lily/James are written in Lily's p.o.v. or in third person. For somebody who normally writes Lily/Snape this is mind blowing. You took James's p.o.v. and really showed that true love that he has for his wife to be. There was a point in there when you refured to him getting her and him saying that he'd agree that she'd come to him in the end but inside be full of doubt. This connects with James's confident, winning, egotistic attitude from Snapes worst memory (OoP). This chapter really connects to the reader because of James's emotions. James questions himself and the war and asks himself why am I fighting? I don't even believe in the war. This is true not just in the books but in real life, people in the army, navy and RAF fight every day without understanding it and just taking orders, but they fight for those back home and stop their loved ones from getting killed, like James said. It was interesting to see James's attitude to Lily's family and to Snape and the death eaters and then comparing him to Sirius before hating himself for doing so. We also saw that loyalty James is know for with his friends and his guilt for not being there with them. The characterisation of James was spot on e.g. him and his love and trying to lighten the mood with an attempt at slight humour, Lily was good e.g. the way she felt the need to help, Pertunia e.g. how cold she is to James and that is how we would imagine her to be. The flow, pace and inner thoughts are perfect. Well done.

Weaknesses/improvments
What to say? This is the first story I have reviewed where I really don't know what to say here. Britpicking wise you were spot on. I didn't see any grammar errors. Good job.

Summary
The idea for the christmas day wedding planning was great. The flow, pace and the characterisation was very good. Just the dialog from the characters and James's inner thought and feelings were brilliant.

My opinion
I completely loved it! I really connected with this and felt that it really rings true for every war and soldier out there fighting a mindless war for their loved ones and following orders. As you can see I don't know how you could improve. This is your first Lily/James, well done and be proud of yourself. A complete pleasure to read. Truely beautiful writing and I feel blessed to of read it.

Thank you for requesting! I hope you benifit from my review, if you have any questions just PM me. Feel free to request anything that you want my opinion on and thank you x

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for leaving such a great review :)

I don't know a lot about James, both because canon is limited in describing him and because I've always been a little resistant in getting to know him because of my Snily prejudices. I did try to explore his emotions a little bit and really get at the root of what makes him who he is. I perceived that to be his loyalty to his friends, his unequivocal hatred of the dark side of the war, and his love for his fiancee. The Snape-related bits probably came from my prejudices, but I did think they were a good way of showing that he'd grown up a lot here since the incident back in his fifth year, that he'd become the man Lily deserved. As for his thoughts about the war, I do think he does sometimes come across in fanfiction as being very macho and all about fighting, and I wanted to emphasize here that he's just a kid like all the others and likely has his doubts and frustrations about what he has to do. Anyway, I'm happy all of that worked for you!

I'm really flattered by your comments and so pleased that I seem to have accomplished my goal: writing a ship I don't totally agree with. Still, after having given it a try, I can see the merit of James/Lily, and I can understand why so many people hold the pairing in high esteem. For me, it just goes to show that JKR created such wonderful, rich characters that they can be seen in many different lights and still appear beautiful to an appreciative reader.

Thanks again for your awesome review! I have a feeling I'll be re-requesting in the future :)

academica


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