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Review:justonemorefic says:
Oooer, that was brill. I really love the setup for the setting. I think the Muggle PoV really gives it something extra creepy and ominous. Strange how a little bit at the beginning about Travis endeared me to him so quickly. When Bellatrix showed up, I was glued to the screen -- HE CAN'T DIE, oh no no no, and then ;_; alas.

Perhaps a bit overzealous with the adjectives at some points, but otherwise, I really adored your description. I could see it all clearly in my head, and felt the same fear that he did. You used the rain and lightning quite creatively for something that's easily overdone and just thrown in for the heck of it to create mood, so thumbs up for that too. I love how you connected it all to the darkness, and how he could only see Fenrir (I imagine) at brief flashes, and then finally, how it highlights Bellatrix (and then I knew he was doomed ;_;)

Great beginning! :)

Author's Response: Lol yea... sometimes I do get lost in words and over explain everything, definitely agree. It's a lot worse BEFORE I edit it to try and reduce it lmao! But regardless, I'm glad that it created a very clear image in your head to go off and you picked up on little details like Fenrir (as quite rightly, Travis didn't know his name or what he was etc) and then BAM! Bellatrix in your face... No one deserves that, god I'm horrible to my characters sometimes... :/

I'm so glad you liked Travis though! I thought it was a different way to go about starting off a story, which quite rightly has nothing to do with Travis whatsoever, but moreso the town of Little Hangleton where Voldemort's fathers house was; that's where the fun begins... :P

Thank you so much for your review, really nice of you and I hope you stick around to read the following chapters if you enjoyed this one so much - they're also sadistic and evil, mwhahaha. *glomps* x


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