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Review:Jenna822 says:
This was quite cute. I liked how you used the characters as being youngsters, just having a nice calm conversation. It's nice to read non-romance stories sometimes. I think you portrayed the characters very well, from Percy to the twins, as well as Ron and Luna. I'm not sure what "or I'll brain you" means. Is that a British term for something?

I like the way you used the grapefruit. It seemed very Luna-esque. You had a good deal of grammatical errors and in the third paragraph, you said "thinks" where I believe that you meant "things". Also the dialogue was very formal, don't be afraid to use contractions or speak your lines aloud.

I really enjoyed your story and thank you for entering the challenge! :) --Jenna

Author's Response: It was very different for me to write, just because they are children with a no romance plot (partly cuz I don't see that ship at all) But I'm very happy that they were close enough portrayals.
You don't know that means? Lol, im not sure what the correct explanation for it is and im not sure its British, but I think its something along the lines of getting smacked upside the head. :D
I'm not to surprised by the grammar, cuz its not my strong point. I don't mind to much as long as the story comes through. :D I think part of the lack of contractions and causality is because I got reprimanded for it once in a very early review and that sorta stuck with me. Lol.
Anyway, thank you so much for making this challenge, I really enjoyed writing it and am glad you enjoyed reading it! :D


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