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Review:CharlieDay says:
And another story to get down with reviewing. A bit longer, this time, so tres exciting. Especially as it's about a Ravenclaw, and being, um, a Ravenclaw myself i likey this. And Fred *loveLOVElove* So shiny. I liked Fred. And this is, y'know, bringing him back, so I can frolic in the imagining that DH never happened.
This was pretty short though, and there was a lot of dialogue. I think maybe you could've balanced out the dialogue a bit to make it flow better. I dunno, though. That might just be a thought.
It was very, very funny though. 'JUST Quidditch?' That has, in context, got to be one of the best line's ever. Another piece of praise I have, that's sort of on characterisation, is that I know you're a kiwi, so as of yet you've written English characters very well. It's not like in the US, where it's all completely different, but you're characters do sound VERY english.
Also, again on a characterisation note, It's very easy to make Fred OOC. Which is why I have a kind of phobia of writing him. But you made him REALLY Fred-like, with all the laugh-y quidditch stuff, and that.
I wasn't so sure about the Ginny, but we know she can be very shy, so it's quite easy to vary her characterisation.
A really good start
Charlie!
xx

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading this, glad you enjoyed it! I'm pretty careful with making my stories sound authentically British - which isn't too difficult as there's a lot of crossover between British and Kiwi slang anyway. Glad you're enjoying this story, and thanks again for reviewing!

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