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Review:Chocolate_Frog says:
Hi! Back for the second review! :)

I think this was a great continuation of the previous chapter. You really captured the spirit of the little kids well, and I could totally imagine them enthusiastically playing Quidditch. I love how Oliver proved himself to them in the end, and the cute little bantering! A lot of characters were also introduced that I'd like to see more of in the future. :D

I found some errors in this chapter also, if you don't mind me pointing out:

+ "That day for the first time the children of the north won a Quidditch game. "

^ This sentence was repeated twice in a row in the chapter! Also, I think you should change the "for" to "was", as it makes it flows more smoothly that way. :)

+ I also noticed a lot of the dialogue were either missing punctuation (e.g "Or we could stay") or capitalization (e.g. "yeah probably in a century or two.") so you might want to look over that. :)

Hope you find this helpful, and feel free to re-request! ^^

~Chocolate_Frog

Author's Response: Thank you for pointing out the errors I'm going to try and edit them before the queue closes :)

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