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Review:apocalypse says:
Hey, this is apocalypse, here with your review!

Let's begin shall we? The first thing I have to say is that I was surprised to see Narcissa's PoV in the story this early. I hadn't really expected that. And as I read on, I realised that this was not the Narcissa that I would have imagined. From Andromeda's point of view, she had seemed different, almost human. Here it felt like the humanity was forced upon her, trying to make her sound sorry and guilty, but proud and superior at the same time.

After reading this, I did not understand why Narcissa's sorry all of a sudden. Of course, she misses her sister, but she realises that now? She's still the same person who hates Muggleborns yet she wants Andromeda to forgive her? Why? Does she really deserve it, considering her train of thought? This PoV did not really clarify that..

In the previous chapter, you had nailed the characterisation perfectly. Here, it got slightly messed up in Narcissa's case. She was clearly.. conflicted? If that word fits.. I hope you know what I mean..

Moving on, the album was a good idea. It showed how much Andromeda had wanted her family to be a part of her life and how much they had shunned her. The album was the only souvenir Narcissa had and it was nice that she had finally looked for it.

Lucius was a shock. He was actually being nice..? How had he changed so much? There was hardly any explanation for that. I had expected Lucius Malfoy to be slightly more mean and bossy, ordering Narcissa to get over her little issue and move on and concentrate on their son who was getting married.

Apart from the marriage news, there really wasn't anything on Draco. I really wanted Narcissa to think about him more. I hope you bring it up in the future =)

I really hope that this review helped you.. =) Thanks for requesting and I can't wait to see where you take this story..!

Author's Response: I can see what you mean - when I get the chance, I'll probably go through and clarify it a bit.

Lucius... I think that maybe we just have different takes on Lucius's character, which is where the confusion comes in. I don't see him as universally mean or bossy at all - sure, he came across that way to Harry, but I think that the way he acts with people he clearly loves would probably be quite different. Based on what we see in the books, Lucius and Narcissa seem to have quite a strong relationship, and I never interpreted it as him being domineering. Different interpretations, I guess. :)

It definitely helped me. :) Thank you!


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