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Review:Phoenix_Flames says:
Hi there! I'm here with your review as requested. First, I just want to apologize for the extremely long wait. I'm so sorry about that. I've been pretty busy with school work and such, and my queue has just been huge these days. So it took me longer than I would have hoped, but I finally made time for this. Thank you for being so patient! And I'm glad you requested!

This was a great opening chapter. I'm sure this will turn into a great story. You already have a wonderful set up, and I can't wait to see where you take it!

You started it off beautifully. It was captivating and it really pulled me in right from the start. I think the most important thing of the first chapter of a multi-chaptered is having an enthralling first chapter. It has to be gripping enough to want to keep your reader going. It has to make them want to read everything from start to finish, and you most definitely did that here in this chapter. You really pulled me in and now I just want to read more. And the fact that you ended it like that makes me only want to continue further on.

Really great! I like your character David. He is unique and original I think he is great, and I like how you didn't take ages to introduce him. I really don't like all the boring introductions, but I love it when the author uses the plot to further develop the character. That's fantastic.

I don't know who he is or if he will be truly good or bad, but I already like him. He seems like such an original guy, and I think I'm in love with his last name too, so that helps a lot. :D

It was good to see Ron and Harry together. You wrote their dialogue together so well. You could see the friendship between the two, and that's wonderful. It all flowed together so seamlessly.

I don't think I passed any mistakes. That's fantastic! There aren't any that I remember off the top of my head. Yay! And your descriptions were fantastic. You really brought it to life and brought the story off the screen.

With such a short chapter, you really made great progress in starting a wonderful story. I would love to see where you take this. Please come request when the next chapter is up! Brilliant job! :)

Author's Response: Hey. That's fine. I didn't mind the wait. I saw the queue. LOL.

Ah, David! I love David. For a special reason. ;)
You're he first person to say you love his last name. I may have to keep it now. :P

Harry is my main character, but I couldn't take Ron away. It's Harry and Ron forever! The non-slash bromance! :D

Yay! Description is not may strong point, so what you just said is amazing to hear!

Yeah, it so short because it's kind of just a prologue. :)

The next chapter is with my beta. I definitely will rerequest. You feedback is amazing. :)

Sam.

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