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Review:Cassius Alcinder says:
Cassius Alcinder here with your review!

First of all I have to commend your writing style. Not too many people can pull off an effective second person narration, but you certainly did. I also really liked your descriptions and analogies, they did a very effective job at capturing the emotions.

I also have to say that your characterizations are excellent, paritcularly of Draco. He's a very layered and complex character and I think you showed that very well. Your portrayal of his relationship with Pansy was superb.

I would like to see a little more of Draco and Astoria's relationship, but the amount you wrote was probably just right for the length of the story.

Thanks for requesting!

Author's Response: Hello!

Thank you so much! Writing second person comes much easier than any other point of view for me. Perhaps it's because of the tone I tend to use and maybe the genre as well. I'm glad you liked the analogies, I honestly thought they didn't work so well, but it seems I was just being silly so thank you :)

Yes. Yes he is. I knew there was always more to him but the perspective the books are in doesn't quite show all that. The war was certainly hard on Draco, so much so that he wanted to get away from everything that reminded him of it, even her.

I thought about extending their relationship description a bit more after writing the ending, but I wasn't so sure where or how to put it. In a while, when I re-read it, then I might try to include something. In the end, I figured the snippet at the end was to show him starting over with someone else.

Thank you for reviewing!
Lia


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