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Review:GinevraMollyPotter says:
Congratulations on your first attempt at a dark story!

I really enjoyed reading this mainly because instead of the typical Teddy/Victoire romance there's something different about it which in my opinion makes it stand out from other stories.

The first part I thought was exceptionally powerful. It was full of emotion and the whole part of me was screaming don't do it, but the way Teddy pleaded tugged at my heart strings and made me think well why is he going to azkaban? Which made me not only want to read on but also look inside Teddy's character a bit more.

I loved the way you then went back to Teddy and Victoire's relationship to make us see the contrast within the two scenes, although both showing love, one is a scene of happiness and the other is one of great sadness. Just the whole train scene after the emotion of Victoire saying the killing curse.

The way you linked the murders to a werewolf and then the fact of being a werewold to Teddy Lupin. The plot seems to be developing well even though it's going pretty fast it seems to work because of the way it links into the next paragraph and learning Teddy is a werewolf.

The only thing I was a little confused about was why it was assumed that Teddy was living in Italy rather than in London. And I'm interested to see why Teddy didn't carry on writing which could also develop as the plot develops.

I can't wait to read the next chapter. Please feel free to re-request :D

GinevraMollyPotter

Author's Response: Thanks for responding so quickly!!! :)

I'm glad the first scenes went over well! I was worried that it might be potentially confusing or seem irrelevant.

The plot is going a bit fast :/ Thanks for bringing that to my attention. I'll try to slow it down a bit, which will help me focus on Victoire's character and personal life!

Victoire just pictured Teddy in Italy for no particular reason - he had always wanted to go there, that kind of thing. Maybe that wasn't clear enough - I'll go back and look at it!

Glad you liked it! Thanks so much for the review! :)


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