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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
This has to be Draco and Pansy - I wasn't sure at first, but the more I read about them knowing each other as children, both being purebloods, and the depth of her affection for him (until the epiphany at the end, that is) narrowed it down. However, it could probably apply to other characters from the Hogwarts era, and I like the idea of the characters remaining unnamed. It means readers don't have to visualize particular characters in they don't want to, and also places more emphasis on the style and other aspects of the story.

Anyway, this is your first one-shot? Really? I never would have guessed because the structure and plot are perfect for a short story like this - there's more to the story, of course, than what you have here, but you focus on this one moment very well with the flashbacks filling in just enough background to explain her feelings. I see nothing to critique at all! :)

Well, I could critique Draco's behaviour, but that's not you, it's him being perfectly canon. That's a great thing to see, actually, that habitual Malfoy coldness that makes him so callous to Pansy - she's been devoted to him and he doesn't deserve it at all. I can't understand his reasons for treating her this way, but this made Pansy far more sympathetic, far more than she ever was in the books (where she was more whiny and clingy). You portray her so realistically and give her depth. I love that little spark of hope at the end - perhaps it's better that he did come to see her at the end because it allowed her to "see" more clearly, realize that she can find something or someone better for herself. It made for a fantastic ending. Great work on this! :D

Author's Response: I like the idea of characters being unnamed as well. It means you have to focus more if you want to figure out who they are. Or they could be anyone you want them to be, I suppose.

Yes, this really is my first one-shot. It took me a month to write it though. I'm so glad you like it though and think it works well. I don't quite remember how exactly the idea popped into my head to have both present and flashbacks.

Okay, it's Draco and Pansy. I give in. I don't know how to reply to this properly without telling. I'm so glad you think Draco is perfectly canon. I wanted him to be cold, but I also wanted him to be thoughtful. And I suppose my point was to make Pansy more sympathetic. While I don't like her in the books, I have learned to like her in fanfiction and I like the idea of her growing up and maturing. And while I didn't think of it at the time, I can see what you mean about her seeing things more clearly by seeing him again. I'm so happy you enjoyed the ending! I really wasn't sure whether or not I should add more too it. Thank you so much for the lovely the review, it means a lot to me.


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