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Review:Happy Hedwig says:
Wow! The first four paragraphs are certainly filled with an air of suspense, so much so that one just has to keep reading. The description is perfect, not too much yet not too little.

Also, you have mastered the reactions and personalities of the characters, they are exactly as I would imagine them to be. Your summary is spot on as well, full of mystery yet not giving the plot away.

Regarding the plot, I think a ball is perfect for this sort of situation, and I especially love Viktor's attitude towards it.

The grammar and punctuation has no errors as far as I can see, which also assists in helping the story flow.

My opinion on your concern over turning this into a short story would probably be that I would absolutely love to read more! I feel that the ball is a great setting to reunite all the characters, yet I would be excited to read a different plot or setting altogether. I appreciate as it is a one-shot, it is difficult to include everything in such a short context.

Great story- well done!

~ Happy Hedwig :D

Author's Response: I've come to quite enjoying writing summaries, as it happens, lol. They're still annoying and hard, but it's quite fun pretending that you're publishing/making a movie out of your story and you need a blurb/tagline-type-thing.
Fleur wasn't too difficult, but Viktor was impossible! He's such a private character that getting into his head was really hard. I'm glad, though, that you think they've turned out alright!
Haha, writing Viktor's attitude was so much fun! Also, because they're kinda similar people I wanted something to make them completely different and to sort of fill them out.
Hm... I'll think about it a little longer, but thanks for your opinion! It just depends on my other projects and what happens with those...

Thank you very much for your review!
Aph xx

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