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Review:NaidatheRavenclaw says:
Wow, this is rare xD Never thought i'd see the day when you'd be asking for reviews. But I'm always happy to read one of your stories!

I have to admit that I was a little skeptical when I saw that this was a retelling of Romeo and Julliet. It seems like half the ScoRoses out there are trying to mirror it. But the way you wrote the first chapter of this made me forget all of that. It was genius. All the metaphors you sprinkled throughout this are gorgeous. Even while you were describing the chess game, you did it so poetically! I felt more like I was reading about a real battle.

Since this is just a short story, I do like how you had Rose fall in love with Scorpius in the first chapter. You managed to set the scene well at the beginning, and since you didn't specify that the two of them hated each other previously, the idea that Rose fell in love wasn't unrealistic at all. And that metaphor of the scorpion's tail stinign her was absolutely gorgeous. One of my favorite lines in all the fanfiction I've read.

You should never have to worry about reviews! Your stories are too perfect >.<

-Naida

Author's Response: Hi, Naida! Thank you so much for coming by to read and review this story - it means a lot! Yes, I'm not the type to request because it's just uncomfortable to go begging like that, but desperate times call for desperate measures, right?

It's been exciting to find a new way of writing Scorose - I personally dislike the ship, but the more I try it out and rewrite its cliches, the more it starts to have a greater appeal. I'm so glad that this story is successful at reworking that cliche. :) I hadn't thought about how soon they fell in love, actually (which I should have - it's a huge issue in romance stories), but you're right that they didn't hate one another before. They would have operated in different worlds, she following her father's advice to be the top student, and I don't know what Scorpius would be doing - he's more of a follower in the beginning of this story, which is also different from his other portrayals in fanfiction.

Thank you again for this review! It's definitely a day-making review. ^_^


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