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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Oh lord, this story! You've gotten me lost for words, and while there were a lot of thoughts going through my head as I read this - things I wanted to mention in this review, it's hard to think of them now that I've hit that last line. I feel like writing "insert unintelligible mass of sounds here" as my review because that's all I have. But I'll try to come up with something. ;)

To begin, you've done a fantastic job with Moody. He's so rarely explored in fanfiction, especially in depth, making any story that does it a great treat. And you do it all in less than 800 words! That's really not fair, you know. You capture his love of battle, his fighting spirit, and his eccentricities wonderfully. That part when he swears that he'll haunt Mundungus was perfect - a spurt of laughter amid this sad, serious story that was very Moody-esque. I loved that he was still proud of being the greatest Auror even as he knew how much people mocked him for his madness, and how he kept thinking about the war and its machinations even as he fell to his death. He never thought about death, never brooded or anything, and that's so different from other death stories that I've read or written - it makes this very refreshing and shows the similarities between Moody and Dumbledore. Death is just another step in their journey.

There was one thing I was uncertain about, though, and that was the use of McGonagall as his fifth-year adviser. The timeline is off a bit because she didn't start teaching until 1956, and if Moody remembered his father's letters from the war in the early 1940s, I don't think it would be possible for him to be still at school when McGonagall was there. Unless he failed, multiple times. That, I could see, oddly enough. :P Sorry about this - I'm just stickler for the timeline (though I messed it up once myself, and have berated myself ever since). Dumbledore would be the more likely choice for his adviser. :)

This is another excellent story from you! I'm not surprised, of course - your one-shots are stunning, and you write these minor-ish characters so well. I'll be looking out for the next thing you write. ^_^

Author's Response: What? No. Okay... no. Fine. I guess it's good :D

I kind of love Moody. He's so amusing in the books/films and I really like the inclusion of him because I think he plays this brilliant dual role of being a sort of comic relief with his gruffness and also hearkening back to the dark days of the first war. He isn't even bothered that a Death Eater impersonated him for close to a year. It's like another day at the office, brush yourself off, back to business. His practicality is amusing and uplifting to me. Anyway, I'm glad that you enjoyed my take on him. I did what I could to try to fill in his background logically and embellish him a bit. I agree that he is a bit like Dumbledore, very matter-of-fact and set on protecting Harry.

You know, you're probably right about Minerva. There was something about this that just wasn't sitting right with me on an unconscious level and I think that must be it. I certainly don't see Moody failing multiple times, particularly given how I've characterized him academically here. I'll have to go back and edit that later - you're right, Dumbledore makes much more sense.

Thank you, Susan! You always leave such fantastic reviews for me, and I really appreciate it. We'll see what happens next :)


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