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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review! Sorry for the wait.

I really enjoyed reading this story- even though the chapters were on the long-ish side they sped right by for me!

Your description was amazing and I really enjoyed the way you characterized Ron, George and Luna. George was sad but he still had his strong personality. I'm glad that you still showed signs of his relationship with Fred and how it still affected their lives. Ron, as well, was just as good as in the books. He was upset and sulking over Hermione and then lovably silly about Luna. I can imagine him berating himself before he was supposed to meet Luna and then not going at all. You definitely managed to write them well.

There are only two questions that I have for you: where was Harry and how did they fall in love so fast? I know that you probably wanted to concentrate more on Ron's feelings for Luna (which worked out to great effect) but I did find it a little odd that Harry was never mentioned, not even in his thoughts. Might there be a backstory to this? Did Harry and Ron have a falling out? Maybe over the whole issue with Hermione? I also realize that Luna and Ron maybe aren't so much in love as in the first stages of love, but Ron's feelings did come out of the blue (at least to me). However I realize that there could be a whole backstory to this- after all, Luna does come to the shop every month for the advertisement- but I think it would help if you expanded a little more on their previous interactions. But these were just minor things in the pleasure I had reading your story.

As well I really enjoyed reading the little history you've created for them. I can see Ron and Luna playing as children and it really helped to give this relationship a solid basis.

I also enjoyed how you didn't end this story with a kiss or a proclamation of love- it would have been too soon, too early in their relationship. I feel that the hug was just the right show of love to end the story with. Great job.

All in all I really enjoyed reading your story. Thanks so much for requesting a review and I hope my comments are helpful!

Author's Response: No worries about the time lapse! I appreciate a good review no matter when it comes about. :)

I'm so glad you liked the story, too -- I know Ron/Luna is a bit of a funky pairing, and it wasn't even one given to me explicitly for this challenge, so where it came from I'll never know. I had thoughts of making this a Snape/Lily, but for some reason... I like this pairing. :3

As for Harry, he just didn't fit in with the flow of events. I know it is a bit weird for him not to be in here at all, but this story is told over the course of three days, and I've gone that long without thinking of good friends before -- especially if I'm a bit distant from them. And with Harry heading up the Aurors at the Ministry, and Ron having left them to help out George at the shop, they're both pretty busy. I tried editing this to include a bit of Harry, but I simply couldn't find a place for him.

I also made a slight edit to the third chapter, so hopefully it's not so... abrupt. Thank you for commenting on that! Someone else did as well recently, and I figured that it probably needed a change if it poked at so many people. :D

Thank you so much for the review, it was lovely! I am glad to see you enjoyed it!


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