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Review:Remus says:
Hey, it's Perelandra from the forums here with your review!

To be honest, I have never read a FF about Barty mostly because I would not have bothered. SO! Yours is the first Barty fic I've ever read! XD

The description was fantastic. I liked how you started with his childhood and moved to his teenager years all the way to his "death". I would've liked, however, for you to have explored as to WHY he decided to become a Death Eater. He liked power, I know, but I feel that there was always more to Barty than we what we read. I mean look at his mother, who sacrificed her last few days/years of her life in Azkaban for him to get out. His father was a Ministry worker who fought for the "good" side so for him to turn out that way...? Again, something must've happened and I think that's the only section I see missing.

Other than that, Barty's characterization was great! Definitely liked that you had him lusting after Bellatrix. Nice touch. This was definitely an enjoyable read! Grammatically speaking and technique you're fine...

Other than that, well all that is left for me to say is great job at this one shot! :)

Author's Response: Hey there!

I'm the first? Woah, no pressure... haha ;)

I think you make a great point. I really like the character now that I've gotten to know him a little bit better, so maybe sometime in the future I'll write more and explore that element a bit more thoroughly. I am glad that you enjoyed the imagery and liked how I went through (most) of his life. I'm also pleased that the characterization worked for you. I was a little concerned about that, this being my first time writing him.

Thanks for your thoughtful review! :)

academica


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