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Review:makemeover says:
Hey there sorry for the wait, but I'm finally reviewing!

This was so sweet and Harry's character makes my heart go all melty inside. My favorite part is when Hermione says to Draco in the fantasy that "it will always be you" but then after he hurts her, she turns it around on him and says "it will always be Harry." I really like how you connected them and I feel like doing something like that (pretty much replacing someone who had an important role in your life) can be so much more hurtful than flat out yelling at them.

As for being realistic, it is very believable as far as Hermione/Draco pairings go. I've never been super opposed to this shipping or refused to read it, but there was always that voice in the back of my head that was like no way. But this story is very clear-cut on what happened, and the way Hermione reacts is just so...well, Hermione.

I like that when Draco comes "crawling" back, if you will, Hermione stands up for herself. In so many stories, and unfortunately even in real life, a girl will take back a guy who's wronged her because she misses him or hasn't found anything better, etc. I'm sick of reading stories where a girl gets back with a guy after he's cheated because he's the one and there's no one like him and her current boyfriend will just never make her feel the same! Guh, gross. And SO not Hermione. You wrote her just as she is in the books, strong and not afraid of someone not liking her and never settling for less than she knows she deserved. So I say - even in such an uncanon pairing, you stayed true to Hermione.

I only got confused in one part. In the beginning when Hermione is talking to Draco, he says "the child is mine and he knows it." At this point, I assumed the child was a boy, but then Hermione says "her father" and I got super confused. It was easily cleared up in the next paragraph when we realize that the child is a girl and that Hermione is with another man, though. It doesn't have to be changed because you do clarify, but just for reference next time you're writing something and two characters are talking about other people.

Other than that, this was definitely enjoyable!

Author's Response: that's okay, i was in no rush for the review! I'm glad you liked it! and i'm glad that i made it realistic, that was the whole point because I (like you) am sick of reading stories where the girl goes crawling back to the guy after he's cheated on her or done horrible things because he's 'the one' *cough, twilight, couch*
and I'm glad that I kept them in character :) One of my weaknesses if making characters OOC, and I know that bit is a bit confusing but that's the only way I could make it work without making it sound plainly obvious.
Anyway, thank you so much for reviewing, it's been very helpful :)


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