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Review:ravenclaw_princess says:
Nice job once again. I'm quite hooked and I find both Hugo and Lysander quite engaging.

There's so much to Hugo and I think we are only just seeing the surface. He seemed like he was in his early twenties in the first chapter so I was surprised to see he's 29. He seems quite confident an self assured, likes to tease, but also has a very caring nature. It's an interesting combination. I think there is a spark, otherwise he's just being a complete tease to Lysander.

Lysander showed a little more maturity in this chapter, at least he didn't come across quite so awkward and nervous. He is taking the task seriously, although he does still seem a little unsure of himself.

I loved how you integrated the personalities of the parents into this story. They were spot on too. Hugo's history is also quite interesting. It will be nice to see his character develop with this in mind.

The house sounds amazing too. I wouldn't complain about having to stay there for a while. All in all, it's another great chapter. Grammar and spelling were pretty good, only a minor typo error that can easily be fixed. The chapter is flowing well and the pace is quite nice. The plot is progressing at a nice speed and the upfront nature of Hugo has quickly established the developing romance. Nice work

Author's Response: Thank you! I love Hugo and Lysander. They are now known as 'my boys'. :D

Yeah, he's 29. JKR said their was a significant age difference between the twins and the rest of the kids; 29 was not too young but not to old. :)

Lysander does seem to mature more in this story, at least I hope so.

You can't leave their parents out. LOL. They play a big part in Hugo's past, why he needs protecting.

I would love to stay there!

Thank you!


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