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Review:makemeover says:
Aaaand back again!

Just like before, I love this. Victoire doesn't make an appearance so obviously there's nothing to comment on her, but I like seeing this side of Teddy. He was so cool and collected in Cloud Nine (for the most part) and even in Fish out of Water he had the guts to ask her out, but it's cool to see him so inside his own head. It definitely flows flawlessly into the next one.

The only thing I would have liked to see more of is more of Teddy's emotions and how feeling about Victoire that way affects the rest of his life, not just his thoughts at the moment. It was all definitely angsty and I realize this fic is also a romance so it can't be constantly depressing, but it would have been cool to see more of Teddy's fears and anxiety about Victoire.

That being said, it's of course not necessary as the story is great how it is! I just commented on it because one of your questions was whether or not you can write angst. Which you can. It would just be cool to see more of Teddy's unhappy-go-lucky side. I still enjoyed it though!

Author's Response: Oooh, I can see what you mean! Maybe I'll go through tonight or tomorrow (depending on my insomnia, haha) and see about adding more of that in, because that would be a great touch.

Thank you so much! :) You're always so helpful!

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