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Review:apocalypse says:
Hey! It's apocalypse from the forums, here with your review!

W-O-W! This. was. amazing! I never thought I would read Barty story and then like it so much! I really liked how you've written it.. good job =)

Over to your concerns first? Well, honestly I don't know which one of these was the quote that was the challenge. Nothing was forced here, all of them were perfectly placed! In fact, you actually created many quotes at the end of every scene! I really liked those; they made me think them over, they actually meant something and are absolutely right! Good job =D

Your first time with this character? Doesn't seem like it at ALL. It looks like YOU're Barty writing down your lifestory. It was a very well organised plot and a rally good idea. I've said this on another story too that I really like it a lot when people write stories on secondary characters. It makes everyone appreciate it all even more =) So I'm really happy you requested this story =)

Since he was a secondary character, I hadn't really thought of his life, but your story put his life into perspective too. He was definitely believable, the same slightly insane, deranged and manic Barty Crouch Jr. we've known =) He's Jo's Barty Jr. and much MUCH more. I wish this hadn't been a one-shot! I really liked this story and wanted to read more! =) I was so immersed in the story that I didn't realise when it began and when it finished. =P

The scenes that you chose to insert were excellent choices. The mother, the girl, then his life changing drastically and then his main and last mission. All of them were perfectly ordered and written. =) and for some reason, I really liked the fact of how he loved his Mark so much. It showed his loyalty and his devotion to his Master and makes everyone appreciate the trait even more (albeit in a weird way =P) His pride and self-satisfaction were also greatly emphasized, showing how much thought you actually put into the character =) It didn't seem like you've only just re-created scenes. It seemed like you'd created another story! =D

A really good job and hats off to you for pulling this one off so brilliantly! =D Good luck with you other stories and happy writing!

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks for taking the time to write such an in-depth review; these are the kind that I tend to write, especially when requested, and I always, always appreciate receiving them.

Firstly, I'm pleased that the quote fit in okay. Obviously, that is the point of the challenge! I'm also glad that I did Barty justice for you. He's grown on me a lot as I've developed and written this piece and I've come to find him a lot more interesting and intriguing than before. I'm happy that I added to canon, as that was kind of my goal in learning him.

I'm glad you picked up on the Mark; he really does treat it like a lover, or at least he does in my head. His passion for Voldemort is really the fulfillment of what he could not muster for women or his family. It also goes to show just how sadistic he is at the core.

Thanks again for your wonderful review :)

academica


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