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Review:Beeezie says:
Hey, this is Beeezie, here with your review!

First, a few quick mechanical notes:
- The third paragraph (starting "Behind the desk") - he was sleeping in the chair, not on it.
- The fifth paragraph (starting "He petted the owl") - he turned the envelope over, not just turned the envelope.
- The twelfth paragraph from the bottom (starting "You have been given") - there should be a comma after "already".
- The fourth paragraph from the bottom (starting "After twenty years") - I would say that Solovyov wanted to argue or started to argue, not went to argue.
- Toward the end, the cloaked figure summons the flask, which moves to his right hand, but then Solovyov tries to reach it before the man can grab it. I was a little confused there about the sequence of events.

Those are all really minor, of course, but I thought I'd point them out. :)

Beyond the tiny mechanical things - I'm really intrigued! I love epidemiology, so I foresee myself really enjoying this story!

This was an excellent prologue. It provided enough information to give me an idea of what is going to follow while still leaving me with plenty of questions. Right now, I'm wondering who the cloaked figure was, what the flask is supposed to do, and whether the disease is engineered to strike purebloods or whether it was meant to go after muggleborns but backfires. (Also, what makes muggleborns immune, and where halfbloods fit into the picture!) It's well-written and a really terrific idea, and I can't wait to read more of it!

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