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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
I really liked the way that you wrote this. The short sentences, the questions, the wondering. I think sometimes short sentences are awkward and the story is read at a faster pace than intended but I think it fit the flow of the story. I thought it was more...secretive, I guess? Short messages passed along in a whisper.

I loved your descriptions in this, especially the comparison between the two girls and the role Draco has and will be playing in each of their lives. I liked this line too: But she is hardly a girl anymore. I think it says a lot about Draco's wife without actually saying it in so many words. I love when authors do that and do it well. :)

Okay, I'm sorry if I get this wrong but I'm going to try and work out what exactly is going on because while I love the flow, the characters and the descriptions, I'm still a bit lost in the plot. So...Draco is marrying an OC, yes? But he still has feelings for Pansy, who is almost in love with another man, and he wonders how his life would have been had it been Pansy he was marrying rather than this OC though he knows that their relationship ended long ago? I'm sorry if I'm completely off but I THINK that's what was going on. Can you clarify if I'm totally dumb and don't get it?

So yeah, aside from me being slightly confused, I really enjoyed this one-shot. I don't read much Draco so I can't really comment too much on his characterization but I enjoyed what I read - the contemplation about his failed and current relationship, the comparison to a butterfly pinned with no wings to fly away anyway - it's all very lovely. :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much and you've got the story right, so don't worry. I'm going to have to edit it into something more understandable, since I had trouble figuring out what was happening upon rereading it, and I'm glad you like it. Thanks for the review!

Annie


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