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Review:makemeover says:
This was definitely a believable one-shot! I think their characterizations were spot-on, this is how I picture both Viktor and Fleur to act.

I love how Fleur is so care-free and oblivious to everyone around her being so impressed by her. She doesn't even notice when people practically drool over her. And I love how Viktor is sort of the opposite - really shy and doesn't say much. He doesn't need to fill silences at all, he's content to just sit in the silence.

Even Ron was written well. I like his interaction with Viktor at the end, and how when he's talking about Hermione, he says, "We're engaged." That's so Ron to have to tack that on at the end - just to let Viktor know like, yeah, you know, she's still mine. I'm the man, I have Hermione, not you.

The only questionable part was in the beginning when Viktor was thinking about how nervous he'd been to ask Fleur out. I can see him being a little nervous, but he reflects on his anxiety during multiple nights and how he couldn't stop thinking about it. He was such a huge Quidditch star though and everyone knew who he was. He had girls following him around at Hogwarts and he had previously been friendly with Fleur, so I don't know that I can see him being that nervous about asking her.

Other than that - it was great! I love the descriptions and this was definitely enjoyable to read!

Author's Response: Thanks - it was really hard to write Viktor, since we don't see that much of him in the books. Fleur was pretty fun and interesting :D

I love Ron, he's hilarious! I tried to keep him true to the books, because it really annoys me when he's OOC and it would be hypocritical of me not to, you know?

Hm... I wasn't too sure about the beginning, but he never seemed to me particularly good with girls, like in GoF when he spends all the time in the Library just to ask Hermione, but at the same time perhaps it was a little OOT. I'll probably take another look at this after NaNo's over, so thanks for mentioning that!

Thanks for the lovely review!
Aph xx


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