u have started really well
now i am reading from the starting .
it seems its going to be a wonderful story.
sorry but i always like to tell the truth . hope it will make u a great writer.
the whole incident with rosemetra was fabulous but i want to pointed out one thing that werewolf cannot remember anything while he is in wolf form thats the basic difference between werewolf and anigami . hope u understand what i want to pointed out .
u can plot it as podfoot told him this night adventure to him and now he was recollecting it.
but if we just forget this little mistake , i can say that its amazing.
i always wonder why wormtail was in gryfindor. he is such a coward.
Author's Response: Firstly, don't worry at all, keep telling the truth, I don't mind and I am not taking it personally - don't feel bad about telling the truth, constructive criticism is always good!
I take your point about werewolves not being about to remember anything while in wolf form, but I think he can remember things, because in 'Prisoner of Azkaban', Lupin tells Harry that when James, Sirius and Peter were with him as animals, Lupin's mind became 'less wolfish', so I took that to mean that while Lupin was with his animal friends, his mind became a little more human, so therefore we could remember things that happened. Plus, he tells Harry that there were 'near misses, and many of them, we would laugh about them afterwards' when they all explored the grounds with Lupin as a werewolf, which I took to mean that Lupin remembered these 'near misses'. Plus, Hagrid tells Harry that he was worried that Lupin might have hurt Buckbeak when Lupin was loose in the grounds as a werewolf, but Lupin told Hagrid he didn't eat anything when he was a werewolf that night so Buckbeak was OK, which again, I took to mean that he could remember bits of what happened at least. I may be wrong, but based on those points from the books, I think that while Lupin is in the company of James, Sirius and Petere in their animal forms, his mind is less wolfish, and therefore he can remember things. Again, keep telling the truth, it's great and don't feel bad about it, I'm not taking it personally at all! :)
I hope that clears things up, but if you still think I've made a mistake, please let me know, I don't want to be making mistakes!
Thanks again for the review!!! :)