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Review:Maddie says:
That was amazing! It really was :D The imagery you created and the metaphors were all spectacular. I especially loved the varied use of vocabulary in particular. My favourite section (which was hard to choose 'cause i pretty much adored the entire thing) was probably the paragraph you put in the summary purely because I think it just describes in such a different, exciting way.

I really think the pace and the style in which you wrote this really matched Lily's character- always on the go, wide-eyed and curious. She was just growing up and learning about the world around her and your writing managed to reflect that wondrous tone, yet still keep a bit of that realistic streak through it with sentences like "She was always wrong".

I adored Albus in this! Even though he was only a fleeting character, he was definitely significant. As a brother I thought he was just so sweet. This line: "Albus just said I love you" was lovely :) I suppose it had to be Albus who inevitably saved her from herself and ended up bringing her home, even it was done indirectly, haha.

So yeah, all in all I really loved the whole piece, it was something different and fresh to what I've read before and I think you did an incredible job with it! Like I said before, amazing imagery! That was my most favourite aspect of it all :) Oh, and I couldn't have chosen a better title for this myself! It really was "electric" 8)

~Maddie x

Author's Response: Wow, this is such a lovely review!! Thank you so much, everything you said was exactly what I was trying to convey.

Thanks for reading (:

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