Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:makemeover says:
Hey there, makemeover from the forums here!

WOW! That's a whole different side of Dom that's never seen! I loved it, though.

I think it's really cool that this is from the mirror's POV. I felt like I was almost holding my breath as I read since the mirror sounds so ancient and full of wisdom, like if I didn't listen carefully enough it would scold me or something. I feel as though it's pretty tough to get a good story out of an inanimate object or from it's POV (as inanimate as the mirror is!), and you did a great job.

I also love your characterization of Dom, even before she looks into the mirror. Since J.K. never wrote about Dom, writers have to create their own Dom, and since her mother is Fleur, it's easy to make her into this perfect creature with long silky hair and perfect skin and really smart and good at Quidditch and so on. I like that she has red hair and isn't really athletic, it's a fresh new take on her. I just read a one-shot in which Victoire had red hair and wasn't perfect and said the same thing. It's not an awful thing to make them perfect and all Veela-y (I'm guilty of it myself), but it's nice to see her in a different light, which is what this story does.

I really enjoyed this story. It's disappointing to start reading a story and then half-way through be like, "Ehhh, I don't really care if I don't finish this," but that wasn't the case with this one. I WANTED to know what happened in the end, especially because it could have gone in a number of different ways. She could have immediately started doing evil things in order to make the vision come true or just laughed and blown the whole thing off or gone and told someone about it in shame/worry (these were some of the things running through my head as I was reading!). But I liked the fairly simple ending. They casually saunter out and she acts like nothing happens. But then that last part! When she thinks, "soon." That could be a great ending that leaves it to the readers imagination, but it also opens the gates for an entire novel on what happens in her life. I love it.

Sorry I rambled on a bit there in the end, I just really liked this one-shot! I hope the parts where I actually left a real review were helpful!

Author's Response: Haha they were! Thankyou so much :)
I was unsure where to go with Dominique but found as soon as I had started - the story pretty much wrote itself!

Thanks again :)

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 163
Submit Report: