WOW. Gahhh! I loved this so, so, SO much! :) Thank you so much for writing it! :D I definitely LOVED Fleur/Krum in this, and even more, I loved how you wrote this fic! You are a very talented writer! I'm definitely going to go check out your other fics this week because you really write wonderfully! Ooh, and I loved how you came up with a situation/plot where Fleur/Krum was so amazingly believable and real!
So I meant to review yesterday, then my dad pulled me away from the computer, but I'm here now! Gosh, from the beginning, you got my attention straightaway, and had me fully hooked all the way through. I LOVED the plot, it is so brilliant and I just really enjoyed how you told the story.
Your writing is so amazing. I really loved how you used more original phrases to convey Viktor's feelings - "A lonely elephant stamped its way through his stomach, butterflies beating restlessly above it" Butterflies are used by quite a few people, but I actually haven't heard of elephants stamping through someone's stomach, which is a brilliant metaphor! The dialogue was all entertaining to read and so in character as well! I loved how you wrote both Viktor and Fleur with accents! I actually didn't think about that, but that is certainly a similarity they have! You did a really great job with the accents, and I liked the few french words thrown in as well - it made it feel even more authentic. So I loved that bit where Viktor reflected about Fleur on their similarities and polar differences and that "Opposites attract, yes, but similarities keep you together." Great line!
I just loved the plot! All the descriptions and dialogue worked so well together. Ooh, I loved the characterisation of the trio, Ginny as well! I really liked how you also wrote about Viktor's emotions and feelings throughout the story! I like how Harry interrupts them, and then that moment when Fleur kisses Viktor is so sweet!
I LOVED this part as well, when Ginny says the paragraph about "Zat girl ees so annoying," and Viktor thinks it's Hermione, but no, it's Ginny! Haha. And of course, this line by Viktor made me laugh as well, "Othervise I vill come over from Bulgaria and break your head." Hehe.
I suppose if I had to find something to critique about it, I'd say the ending. I mean, the ending is beautiful, finishing it with a line that connects it to the beginning, but it did feel just a little abrupt. I would have loved to see the complete ending of the night ;) if that makes sense! But really minor detail because..
Wow~ I just honestly really loved and really enjoyed this story. Not only do you write absolutely wonderfully with the plot, all the characterisation.. but the basically perfect grammar, spelling and punctuation really made this a flawless story. Absolutely brilliant! Again, thanks so much for writing this. It's definitely a really unique story, and to reiterate - you are a fantastic writer and I loved this!
- charlotte :)
Author's Response: Aww, thanks! *hugs* I actually wrote it and then scrapped the entire thing because I hated it... and then wrote this, lol. Took me so long to be happy with it.
I debated about what metaphor to use coz butterflies are always used, I used tiger in another fic and decided (somehow) on elephant. It was completely random, but I'm glad you like it. The accents were murder to write! Gosh, I can't remember how many times I had to go back and change a 'the' or 'we' to something else, lol.
Viktor's emotions... grr... it was so hard! The plot, on the other hand, was the second one and I felt it kinda gave me more of a chance to show everything, rather than tell everything.
Of course he thinks it's Hermione, lol! He's so oblivious, it's cute. I tried to find a better threat, but thought that it kinda worked. It made me giggle too.
I debated about continuing it, but had no idea what else to write, lol. It kinda finished itself...
Thanks so much for all the wonderful compliments! I enjoyed writing it (even though at times I wanted to hit my head on a wall :D) and it was definitely a new experience for me. I'm really glad you like it!