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Review:FoundriaPenguin says:
Wow. Even though it was 500 words, that was a really powerful piece. :O

JANECHEL, I AM HERE AGAIN DUE TO YOUR EPIC CORVARIUM STALKING POWERS. ♥ Anyways, I love the way you craft stories. You have great description that I envy from the deepest corners of my heart. D: I hope you're up to sharing some with me! 8D

You don't name any characters in this story, but from the first few bits of the one-shot my mind immediately flew to Harry and Ginny. I think it was this bit that officially sold me: "why would he choose you, out of hundreds? But you were his target from the first moment he saw you, it seems."

However, once you mentioned the ages, my mind casted around for a possible name and face...but this one-shot could've really happened to anyone during the final battle. It's like you had the final battle on tape in front of you, you randomly paused it at this one point and saw the scene unfolding in front of you. It all seems so very real.

For example, the fear you've put into the narrator's description of the scene is great and terrible at the same time. Great in terms of writing, of course, since yours is practically impeccable, and terrible in terms of how it made me feel! I sympathize a lot with characters in general. :P But I felt so conflicted as I read the second half of the story. The fact that you can invoke such emotion in your readers is a mark of a good writer :)

Excellent job on this, love. It really ought to have more reviews like your other stuff has :) Even if it's short, you've fit the perfect amount of substance into 500 words, and it's not even fluff, it's deep stuff. It's such a sensitive topic this one-shot had to be rated mature. ;) I had a few favorite lines in here, but I don't think they're 12+ so I won't put them in the review heh xD

This was brill, if you couldn't tell from my ramblings already.

much love,
jordan ♥

Author's Response: JORDANNN. -flail-

The characters in this story are OCs -- OC Ravenclaws, actually. I'm not sure where they came from or what I'll do with them, but they're stuck in my mind. :3

You know what's funny? This one-shot came about because I'd seen one of the trailers for DH Pt. 2, one of the battle scenes, and it was replaying itself in my head. :D YOU'RE SUCH A GENIUS, JORDAN. ♥

Thank you heaps and bounds for such a lovely review, dear. -hugs- It totally made my day!

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