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Review:dobbys_socks says:
I loved those two chapters! Really, really well written; I have so many good points to tell you!

Radio, Radio: The only sort of negative thing I have to say is just to watch your tenses as they seem to waver between past and present. I really love how the boss kept the girls in the waiting room: it reminded me of the Mysterious Benedict Society. I am so jealous of Wendy getting so many days off and I love the boss! My favourite line is "Wednesday is Classical Day."

Anarchy in the U.K.: This chapter was brilliant as well! Again, I love how you used dog and bear words to describe Sirius. The only negative thing is my character potrayal alert kicking in AGAIN. Sorry. I just thought that Peter could have been a little shyer - when the Marauders were in school Peter was descibed as a timid looking boy who followed James and Sirius around in awe, and I just felt that he seemed too brave. This chapter was really, really good and I'm going to repeat that (really, really good) because I know you were worried about not getting enough feedback.

So overall (and I mean overall overall), I really liked your story. You added some real personal flair to it which really made it different than other stories. Fantastic, brilliant job. Well done.

Thanks for letting me review your wonderful story,
G

Author's Response: Thank you for this kind review!

I will go back an take a look at those tenses. I have always had an issue with that when I write a chapter in multiple sittings. I'm glad you like the boss - he is a joy to write. I wanted him to be the opposite of what one expects.

I get your point about Peter. I will probably fix that in rewrites. I just want so hard to give you a reason to like him, since the Marauders must have a reason to like him. Yeah, he's timid but there must've been some quality in him that made him friendship material. Maybe I'm crazy though.

Thank you again for all of these lovely reviews! I'm very glad for your honest feedback and I will give it my best-faith effort to pull in all of your thoughtful suggestions.


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