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Review:SearchingForLuna says:
I love the start to this story! Amelia and Scorpius seem like quite the quirky pair of cousins, which is cool because, I mean, who doesnít like quirkiness? (Boring people, thatís who.)

At the beginning you had some good suspense there! You were all like IíLL REVEAL A STRANGE PLAN AT THE END OF THE CHAPTER and I was like *drool*.

Plus, you had nice background-y stuff about her Mum and her, which was a good way to slip in some characterization. One suggestion Iím going to make (you donít have to follow this, itís just my preference) is to, instead of saying ďScorpius wasnít what you call a quiet person,Ē reveal his loudness through his actions. Let the reader get a feel for the character instead of informing the reader about him or her.

I love how Scorpius and Amelia know each other so well :)

Great first chapter!! :D

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