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Review:megan2u says:
I've noticed a big difference in this chapter from the other work of yours I've read, there seem to be many changes in tense that comes across as awkward to the reader, as well as less action/plot in the chapter. This is probably just because with one shots you have to tell the entire story in a shorter amount of time, and with a WIP you need to build up to the story. I will say I'm not entirely sure what's going to happen with this story, but I'm expecting a baby Scorpius to be born soon, since 19 years later he's ready to attend Hogwarts! This review isn't meant to discourage you in any way, as it is still free of spelling mistakes and the story is intriguing, I'm just pointing out that it's not as strong as your previous works and maybe requires a Beta or some more proofreading for grammar.

Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much for this! I absolutely love getting crit, and it makes me so glad that you've done that. The changes in tense actually come as a surprise to me. I didn't realize I was doing that, but I'll definitely go through and fix those! :) The story isn't canon compliant though, so no Scorpius xD I think this chapter is more of an intro for me, since this is a novel length story, which is why it's not quite in the style of my one shots. Thanks for all the crit though! I'll definitely be going through and proofreading :)
-Naida


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