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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review!

I really enjoyed how you started this story, using a scene that we've seen in the books and making it your own.

I think you characterized Phineas very well using what we've seen in the books. He was very proud of being a Black and so of course he wouldn't stoop to being someone else's servant, not when he was the master when he was alive. The line "his dignity was still intact and he desired to keep it so" is a great way to describe his character in a few words.

Why did you use "Nigellus" in the line "what persuaded Nigellus"? All the other times you wrote "Phineas" and I think to switch in that line (unless you had a deeper meaning behind the switch) is a little disconcerting. I thought for a moment that I was reading the same character until I remembered that "Nigellus" was his last name.

I liked the way you linked Peeves and Phineas together. It's nice to read little details that help to make the story come alive, the history to seem more real.

Your ending was really well done. It showed that this story did have some sort of "point" or "place" that it was going and it got there realistically. I do think that seeing Sirius all cooped up would change his mind- after all, as you said, at least he had freedom when he was alive. The last few words really pulled it together, showing one the famous Black pride.

Overall I enjoyed reading this story and I found it interesting. I've never read a story from the point of view of a portrait before and I think you really pulled it off. Thanks so much for requesting a review and I hope my comments are helpful!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the wonderful review!! I am glad you liked it! oh that was my slip I guess, I'll change it to Phineas :)

Thanks once again. I am thrilled that you found it in-character overall and interesting!


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