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Review:NaidatheRavenclaw says:
Hello! Naida here from the forums with your review!

This was amazing. Honestly. I read this through twice trying to find something I didn't like about it. The idea, first of all, isn't typically explored as much as it could be. I assume, and I may be completely wrong here, that Harry's mental issues are a result of PTSS type thing, which is so plausible. The kid's been through a lot. I think there'd be some lasting effects. You managed to capture that, and give us a view into his broken mind, and you did it so well!

I really loved some of the word choice and imagery you had going in here. One of my favorite lines was "Time stood still just before the pieces, jagged and beautiful and dangerous, exploded everywhere, and for that brief oasis of time he saw himself" which is, incidentally, probably one of the most poignant lines I've EVER read on HPFF. The jagged and beautiful and dangerous part gave me such a vivid image of what was going on, and it really was incredible. The way you worked magic with the words wasn't easy.

I really wish I could give you some proper critique on this, lol. It's just so flawless. I couldn't even pick up on any typos. Um, the one thing I think you could improve slightly on is the flow between sections. In the sections, that really fragmented and twisted approach of linking things together works well, but it's a bit jumpy between sections. What I mean by that is that you're taking me to an entirely new place, and I have to just become accustomed to that for the first few paragraphs, making me miss out on your wonderful writing. Just a tad bit more continuity between sections would be absolutely great.

Really though, one of the best one-shots I've read in a long time! You did an incredible job with this.

-Naida

Author's Response: THIS REVIEW. You've left me completely boggled, thanks so much for such glowing compliments. I cannot express my appreciation for them enough.

As for the linking -- the jarring is on purpose. :) It's supposed to sort of unsettle you for a bit. The writing is based heavily on the styles of Faulkner and McCarthy, and they're both very complex writers. Not easy to read, let me tell you! Continuity, I feel, might detract from that.

Thank you SO much, honestly. This was an amazing review and I am honored to have it.


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