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Review:Woodrow Rynne says:
Lovely one-shot.

I'll start off by saying that I absolutely loved the way you characterised Vernon. It was one thing that truly drew me in to read more, because you were so spot on in characterising him. He seems positively maniac.

Petunia, on the other hand, I'm not too sure of. I liked how you characterised her, of course, everyone who's read HP has probably sympthasised with her at least once, but I somehow feel this could've been much better. I suppose it's the way she converses with her husband-- we've never seen her that way, and her attitude didn't really seem fitting to me. (But perhaps that was intentional and I'm being silly!)

But other than that, your writing is absolutely fantastic. :) I loved the way you described Petunia's feelings. Great work, and I hope my silly comments weren't too confusing.

Author's Response: I had a lot of fun writing Vernon! With characters like that who just make a small appearance, you can really have fun by exaggerating certain characteristics.

I think you make a valid point about Petunia. It's true that normally she appears to cave in to Vernon. However, there is one instance in the book where we see her stand up to him. It occurs in the fifth book, after Harry saves Dudley from the dementors. Vernon wants to force Harry to leave, but Dumbledore sends a Howler. After that, Petunia stands up to Vernon and tells him Harry has to stay.

Originally, I meant this story to take place at that moment. However, I realized as I was writing that it happened in the fifth book, and this was supposed to be a missing moment from book six (for a challenge). That required a bit of tweaking, making it more memory-based, I guess. I think it did weaken the story.

Anyway, that's my explanation, and I understand where you're coming from with Petunia's characterization.


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