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Review:Sam says:
`Hey that was way better! It read far better. I thought you set the scene really well. But a good part of the mystery surrounding prophecies is that they're done in confidence. Ie: Snape, Dumbledore and Trelawney with the prophecy regarding Voldemort and Harry, or just Harry with the one regarding Wormtail. But this was done in a public place in one sentence! You could have set it up that they were walking through a corridor and done a rhyming poetic prediction like the others...! But other than that small quip I thought this was good. Hermione's dialogue was more on the money. Ron's little thought about the origins of the new students was great. All interesting and good. You just need to get swept up in the world a little more. That's why it's such a great series, because of the world. Don't get so caught up in getting the plot across in bullet points, allow the reader to pull at the plot and make their own predictions etc whilst they get swept up in the amazing world!

Author's Response: Thanks. Good. Again, I probably should have gone back and checked how the prophecies were written. Here I just did it from memory - probably more from the movie than the book - and just stuck it in somewhere. It could have been developed more.

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