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Review:Phoenix_Flames says:
Hello there! I'm here with your review as requested. I am so very sorry for the long wait. I have been incredibly busy, and my queue has exploded and has been quite huge lately. So I'm sorry about that, but I'm finally here now!

And ah, I always love your pieces. I loved Charm Those Words, and I had been meaning to read more of your stuff, but I've just been busy, busy! So I'm so glad I got to read this, and it did not disappoint. I loved it so much.

This was such a creative piece! There aren't many stories out there about Phineas. Actually, I can't even think of one off the top of my head that I have read about him. So this was so clever and so unique. I love to see it when author's step out and do something new that we have yet to come across, and I thought you did it brilliantly.

I loved how you started the piece off. You set the scene up brilliantly with that descriptive introduction. It was a great way to captivate me and prepare me for the rest of the story.

I think you picked a perfect moment to showcase Phineas' character. It was clever to piece this little story into the HP series like this.

We got a great sense of his character as Dumbledore sent him on his task, his slight reluctance, and his irritation for living in a frame. I think you also described that perfectly; Phineas' confinement to a frame. That really must suck. With the way I think it, there's actually a different version of someone in there. They interact with other people in frames and people in the real world, therefore there must be some sort of knowledge or acknowledgement, and with that comes emotion So I find it perfectly in character that Phineas feels like this, and I love how you showed it.

This was a great piece, and in the end you really got his emotions across there. I could feel for Phineas.

Really, my only piece of advice is that it was a little bit dialogue heavy for a bit of the piece early on in the story. There's the exchange of dialogue maybe six or seven times without anything else really besides speaking verbs and it felt a little thick and weighed down in that section, but that's it. That's really all I noticed. It transitioned nicely into everything else, and I think you made up for that there at the end.

As such, the flow was great. It went nicely into each other, piece by piece. I could really feel like I was in the frame with him.

This was such a great piece, and really quite clever! I very much enjoyed it, and I'm glad you tried something different!

Thanks for requesting, and I hope this was somewhat useful to you! Thanks, love! :)

Author's Response: hey!!

Your reviews never cease to make me smile!! Thank you so much for such an amazing review! You hit on all details, and it really made my day. I am thrilled you liked it so much! If I ever do an edit, I will make sure to edit out the dialogue in the beginning! Thanks a lot for such an insightful review! I am so happy you liked it!

Thanks a lot!

cheers!
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