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Review:Beeezie says:
It was definitely an okay read overall! (In fact, I would say that it's more than okay. :) )

This is a hard prompt (which is part of why this was not a challenge that I signed up for), and I think you did a good job with it. I felt like both Dumbledore and Phineas were very much in character, and I could completely understand why he found his life as a portrait to be so boring. Terrific job on that front.

There were only two things that I wasn't a huge fan of, and they're both really minor. Giving Peeves the backstory felt a little odd to me, because it got my mind sidetracked on "is that a poltergeist comes into existence?" and wondering about Peeves's character evolution. I'm totally guilty of the same thing all the time, but it was a bit distracting to me because it took my focus off Phineas.

The other thing (and this is really, really minor) is that I was wondering when exactly this was taking place and why Dumbledore was asking. A line or two to clarify that really would have helped me a lot. Maybe that's just me, though!

On the whole, this is a fun story, and I think that you did a great job. :)

Author's Response: Hi there!

Well firstly thank you for reading and reviewing! you were pretty quick =D

I am glad you found it more than okay!! LOL.
I know, it was quite hard for me to write it - I really struggled a lot but I did it xD
I am relieved you found Dumbledore and Phineas in character!! :)
Hmm, well I did put in the Peeves thing just to, well I don't know why I did - it just came. And I thought it was sort of nice (IMO at least). Sorry if you found it off-track and not so pleasing. Honestly speaking, it is a part that I kind of like so I don't think I'll remove it even if it is not so good. And I thought some mention of other characters would be good so I did it - but oh well nevermind :)
Thank you so much for your valuable comments! I really appreciate them!
About the time - well it is taking place sometime during OoTp when Dumbledore instructed Sirius to not go out of Grimmauld place but if that's not clear - I will put it in the authors note! Thanks for pointing it out!

I am glad you found it fun and good (even though I still think it is not so much) - thank you so much!! :)

Cheers!
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