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Review:Salem says:
Agnes from the forums, reviewing!

--Oh and before I forget, I do want that metaphorical chocolate!

Pigfarts. I absolutely loved that you included an AVPM reference! That immediately let me know that your style of humor would be of the right brand right off the bat. This was further proven by the chocolate brownie bit.

I think my favorite part is the fact that this is all from Lysander's point of view. I can just picture him as this insane wannabe overlord--which is quite contrary to my own head canon view of Lysander. So, for me, it's very interesting to see him portrayed in such a humorous, somewhat pompous, manner. I also like the way this was written in a stream of conscience style, where he goes off on tangents and random maniacal spouts before coming together at the end with another equally as random topic! A bit confusing, but I can't say that I dislike it.

I was a bit concerned about the 'accomplished legilimens' part, though--was he just joking, or is he actually a legilimens? I seem to recall that learning such a thing was highly controversial in the wizarding world and that it wasn't something to be openly taught. Not saying it's impossible, just a thing that shouldn't be taken lightly and mentioned so casually. But that point aside, I have a strong feeling that Lysander here could possibly be a dark/evil wizard in the making.

One typo I noticed was near the end--"when he got to big to be the quaffle" should be "too big" instead.

Author's Response: Hi! Here is your large bar of metaphorical chocolate for that lovely long review =)
Thank you so much! I do enjoy writing him and his randomness. The other chapters (I hope) are a bit more structured, so hopefully that will be less confusing.
I never thought of that about legilimency, so thank you for pointing that out! =)
Enjoy your chocolate =)


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