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Review:leannemariesnape says:
This is a really good take on the story of Pandora's box! I really enjoyed it and I never really thought that the God's were just wizards, but it works. The way it was written was almost like a bed time story, which is awesome. There are a couple of things to improve on, in my opinion, and these things are the flow of the story and also one little typo.

So, first, the flow. I found it a little difficult to follow at times, so maybe you could explain certain things in a different way? For example there are a few sentences where you say something like "Bob grinned at himself in the mirror, and picked up the hairbrush that Bob had bought"... (Obviously, that wasn't from your story, it was just an example, LOL :D ) Which just sounds a little awkward. I hope that made sense, lol. Although, this is just my personal opinion, and, to be honest, I'm not great with flow, so take my opinion with a pinch of salt, haha.

Oh, yeah. There was one typo at the start of the story: "only mortals where men" where should have been were. Apart from this there were no spelling or grammar mishaps. :)

Good story. It was really interesting, and I liked the ending, with the idea of giving people magical abilities in this way. Well done!

Leanne :) x

Author's Response: Awww, thank you so much for the wonderful review! It was so awesome! Yeah, I do need to work on the flow, and a typo, oops!
Thanks again for the review, it made my day!

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