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Review:_Leo_ says:
Hi again!

So I'm guessing Samantha is the daughter of the couple from the prologue? I wonder if they survived the fire or not. I can't really comment on her yet, except that she seems to have a thing for Remus and gets jealous if he talks to others, and doesn't get along with the other Gryffindor girls.
A variation of the Marauderette-story, I would say. Don't get me wrong, that's nothing bad in my book, if it's done right, only I have incredibly high expectations when it comes to Marauder era, as those are the reason I got into HP fanficton. I'm curious how you spin it and what happens next :)
What I liked about your set-up was that you didn't start off immediately with the train ride, but set the prologue before it.

The idea with James trying to have all meetings at the same time was funny, and something I can picture him doing. Sirius seemed in character as well when casually teasing Peter.

Some mistakes I noticed:
that appeared like Hippogriffs with there heads cut off. - their (Lol, homonyms are a pet-peeve of mine.)
She sighed, missing how her compartment was when just her and the Marauders in it. - verb?

Good start, and I'm interested to see how her past - though I work with the assumption that the couple is related to her - will come into the plot, and the plot twists you'll come up with. And of course the Lily-James interaction and how they get together ;)

xox Leo

Author's Response: Wow, this review occured so long ago that I greatly apologize for the time it took my to respond! I know you took so much time to do your reviews, and I REALLY appreciate every single one of them for being so insightful and helpful.

I guess this is why this story hit the brick wall. I also have exceedingly high expectations for Marauder-era stories, especially for the ones that fall into the 5th girl Marauder cliche, so I'm not sure where it's going for now. I will continue this story eventually, as it is my baby, but my perfectionism is blocking me...so c'est la vie.

As always, thanks for the concrit and for somehow always seeing what's coming before it's tied together more clearly :P

Best,
Ellie


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