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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey there!

This is AditiDraco95 =)

Wow, you did an amazing job with this piece!

Firstly, let me say, I do not generally read Second Persons because they confuse me, But you pulled it off so well - there was no confusion at all! You did write this really well. The emotions and feelings came off greatly as well. I could feel Remus' pain and I must say it was portrayed really well. The Angst was quite prominent and I liked that. I was really hooked while reading. You wove your story around the scenario I gave you quite well - there were so many plots running through my mind for the situation but I definitely didn't think of this - good job!!
All in all, the emotion, the characterization, the plot and the narrative was really very good.

A well deserved 10/10 for the story!

Cheers!
AD

P.S. Thank you for entering my challenge :)

Author's Response: Hi!

I don't read or write second person, really. I hate it passionately but when I started with 'he is dead', I thought it would be too confusing to refer to Sirius AND Remus as he, hence the choice of narrative. I'm so glad it worked!

I had a few ideas too but then I thought of this moment. It's one that breaks my heart in the film because I never think about Harry trying to get to Sirius, but Remus holding onto the only thing he now has left and doing so to stop himself from diving after him. That's really what inspired this.

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it and it's no problem - I really enoyed writing this.

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