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Review:Salem says:
Agnes bringing your review :)!

Readability was no problem whatsoever. The flow was very smooth, without a hitch! As for characterization, it seemed spot-on from what I can tell. I could imagine this actually happening between all of the characters, and that's always a good thing.

I really liked the mood you set for this chapter.

I could feel that something serious was going to happen by the way you described the dank surroundings and then--oh my, Voldemort appears! Definitely serious. Then, near the end when Severus is begging him to spare Lily, the setting becomes sort of surreal, especially when you mentioned him almost blacking out before holding his hand out to Voldemort in a dream-like state. I wonder just what Snape's got himself into with that Unbreakable Vow. Making deals with the devil is never a good thing... For that reason, I found the beginnings of this plot to be very immersing.

I will definitely be keeping an eye out for updates on this one!

Author's Response: I'm always worried about characterization of Voldemort (he's one of the characters who I am always like "I'm not sure..." about). And I haven't written an emotional Snape in a long time, so I was really nervous about how he'd come across. I'm really glad that it seemed natural.

Yay on the mood. I really wanted to set up the mood because the mood is really important for the overall story.

I'm glad to hear that I've peeked your interest, and I hope you continue on reading. Thank you so much for your review!
-Houlestar


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