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Review:C says:
I really like this story =]
I did think that you should have elaborated on Lily's friends' and James' friends thoughts and experiences throughout James'...er, depression? Not sure if that's the right word... You mentioned that Sirius was really bummed by James' uncharacteristically sad attitude and that he and Alisha (or was it Alora? I think it was Alisha...) were talking a lot and growing closer. But you just mentioned it. The same with Remus and Alora getting together. I know they're not the main vein of the story, but I think you should have included one of the friends' perspectives because it really adds to our understanding of James' condition and how it affects everyone. I'd like to see more of the friends' lives in the story and how James and Lily affect their lives. Also I'd like to see more how developments in the friends' lives affect James and Lily.
Also at some points the tone became a little weak and the focus fell on the actions too much and the emotions too little. I thought I'd mention this as a way of saying it's okay to overdramatize. In fact, I usually love it when authors do.
But overall it was a good chapter with lots of action =] I really like this story because of how well you display James and Lily's personalities.

Author's Response: I am delighted by your detailed comment :) I am going to take your advice and add more of Remus's and Siris's love life.
I think that will be a great idea but I'll probably do it in the holidays which is nearby. :)
Thanks C I am really grateful to you. You always read my stories and give me feed back. :) Thanks!


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