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Review:Remus says:
Hey! I'm back again.

What is going on?! I'm sorry that I'm not writing a "helpful" review and acting like "normal" reader but I want to know what is going on?! This is interesting, VERY interesting.

Alright, for the "helpful" part. I absolutely love the beginning. The details really took me to that place by the Black Lake with everyone enjoying that bit of summer. And when Hermione was thrown into the lake...her emotions and panic read so real. Kudos to you!

The second part of the chapter totally threw me off. Nice curve ball since again, I was not expecting any of this. The "fake" ending with the Scream coming from Fred made me go "no!" in my head because I wanted to read more. Thankfully you had the end with The Founders to explain a bit of it.

A few critiques I have...Godric would sit on a throne which is a chair and not a thrown which means to propel. Also "Walking through the remainder of the portraits Godric smiled as he saw the light golden frame of his own portrait twinkling just ahead of him passed Helgaís long silky black hair." That sentence makes no sense to me at all. Either I'm tired or you could be missing a coma or a period somewhere around there because you go from him seeing his portrait to Helga's hair in a beat. You're also missing a lot of comas, for example when you have "I unlike some do not desire to see what the outside world has become." it would be better to have "I, unlike some, do not desire."

Anyway, that's all I have to say for this! Hope you update soon!

Author's Response: hello thank you for stopping by again.

I am so glad you enojoy reading this story, as for what is going on. I am unable to tell you entirely but I assure you that in the next chapter alot of what is confusing will be cleared up :) Promise. x

The emotion from Hermione being thrown in the lake (look I get where I mucked up with throwns now :P) was a real struggle as I find emotions really hard to do, but I had alot of help with that part so I am glad you could see what I was trying to get across. AditiDraco and Katherine045 helped me alot with that scene.

Threw you off? Oh I am so sorry :P lol. Not ;) It was meant too.fake ending ? O.o What did I do? x lol Sorry, I thought it was nice to end the Hermione part there and move on to the next section. The magic that is making the world what it is is from the founders era so that is why they know so much about what they know. We will find out alot more about this later on down the track ;)

I have taken all your suggestions and misspelling into consideration and will fix what I can shortly :) Thank you for all your help within this chapter and the previous one :) xx

Thank you soo much for your lovely review!!!

~Karni. xx


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