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Review:Remus says:
Hey its Perelandra from the forums with your review! Sorry it has taken a while...but I'm here!

Alright, your writing style is full of detail at the beginning which paints a great picture to the reader. The one small thing that I would like to point out (as it was once pointed out to me an would like to do the same) when you write a sentence such as "That was close" Draco mumbled, dusting off his robes and throwing his hood back off his head. There's usually a coma after 'close'. Most of your dialogues end with the period...if you add a coma, you'll have fuller sentences instead of short ones.

Plotwise...I'm intrigued! I wasn't expecting Malfoy to go up an hug Seamus. It was a very 'wth' moment for me. Thanks for the surprise! Why does Hermione not remember anything? I cannot comment more on the plot as its just beginning but so far, its very intriguing!

I'll continue on to chapter 2 now! :D

Author's Response: Hello !! Welcome to my AU story, one of many lol ;) do not worry about the wait, I have three from April I still need to review :/ so Please do not stress, at all!!

Really? Wow im so glad I can get the imagery and scenerary that I have in my mind across to my readers. The Dialogues have been pointed out to me as I was not aware of what I was meant to do, I never learnt about Dialogues in school (Could be in result too me hating my english teacher and throwing paper airplanes aorund the room :P) So I never really learnt about them because I didn't listen much in English :/ But Now that it has been explained to me, from you and a few others who have helped me in other stories, I understand what I did wrong and how to fix them.

In further chapters, you will learn why Seamus and Draco are such close friends, lol. Blaise is also included in that but as you know he was more interested in Hermione, speaking of, why she can't remember anything will become apparant in about chapter 8 - 10? I haven't decided yet, but it will make sense around that time. :)

I am glad you are intrigued :D That makes me happy!!

Thank you for continuing !

~Karni. xx


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