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Review:Atomic says:
Hi there, it's Atomic with your requested review!! I am sooo sorry it took me this long to get back to you. College takes up far too much time.

I was so thrilled when I saw this request. I absolutely love stories about the Black girls!! You've done such a marvelous job with them, too. I honestly think that the characterization was perfect. I would have preferred to see Andromeda's departure as it happened, and not so much as a recount of it, but you still did an amazing job with the story. Bellatrix was her usual manipulative and evil self, and poor Narcissa just wanted everything to go smoothly.

I especially loved the way you portrayed Narcissa. You can tell she loved Andromeda dearly and that it was a huge blow to her when she left, but at the same time she was trying her hardest not to let it affect her. She seemed so posh and pureblood. I was really impressed with the way you managed to show just how upset she was and still manage to keep her composed for the majority of the story.

Her relationship with Lucius is adorable too. He seemed so flustered when Narcissa started crying, yet you can tell that he really does care about her, and she him. Perfect ending, by the way. It was very touching.

The imagery was beautiful too. I really got a feel for Malfoy Mannor, and it set the tone for the story quite well. The restaurant scene was excellently done too. I felt so sorry for Narcissa when she started crying and people were angry with her. That poor girl.

You did an amazing job with this, it was extremely unique and excellently written. I absolutely loved it and I honestly can't offer any suggestions because it's seriously perfect the way it is. Great job! And always feel free to request!!!

Author's Response: Hi, thanks for coming by! Your thread seems about as busy as mine, so I was glad to snag a spot at last :) And don't worry about the time; it wasn't that long, and I know all about the workload, trust me!

I'm happy I gave you a story with some characters you like. I love the Black sisters as well, and I especially relished the chance to write a little about Andromeda, because I think her story is really interesting, even if it's also really sad. I love Bellatrix, too. However, I think Narcissa is definitely my favorite, and I'm pleased that you were able to appreciate the complexity I gave her character here.

I'm so happy you liked the fluff! Fluff is sort of a new thing for me to explore, and it was interesting trying to make someone like Lucius into a romantic figure. But I really do think they care about one another, and I'm glad that you felt that those feelings came through okay. I'm also glad you liked the ending. I certainly didn't want it to seem contrived.

Thanks for the compliments about the imagery! I work hard on it, and I'm happy when my readers appreciate what I've done. And yes, poor Narcissa at the restaurant!

I'm so flattered that you found nothing to critique, and I really appreciate your thoughtful review. I'll definitely be back to request for something else in the future.

Thanks again! :)


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