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Review:Groundswell says:
Wow. Just want to say I absolutely loved this!

Huge L/J shipper here, but this piece was so well done, and... well, I didn't mind it one bit. Also, the fact that you had two major things in this, making it not really about the pairing, but about Sirius and his departure, it kind of made it more 'acceptable' in lack of better words. Because it was just a thing happening, and that's it, nothing more to that. Very good.

A few 'mistakes' you made. In the very beginning, James is sloshing around a glass with firewhiskey. Two sentences later, it's rum. Just noticing. Also, if the guys are 16, then how come they apparat away from there?

The guys' way of talking is just perfect. It's not overdone, close to a bromance, as many does it, but a perfect friendship between them. I especially liked Sirius' comment about Bellatrix :P Also, their characters, as you portraited them, was perfect. Sirius and his reactions to his mother, James and his help to Sirius and his whole way of just being... Spot on.

Aww, and Sirius can be nice to houseelves, giving them pats on their heads - I liked that!

Wow, that was probably the world's best reaction to be seduced, it made me both cringe my toes, laugh and gasp. It had all these very different elements put together so perfectly. The little mention of Lily here was perfect, not overdone.

Your eye for detail is very good. You put in all these small things once in a while, not overdoing it and not getting into long rambles of a simple things. It keeps the reader there, attentive.

All in all, this was a really good one-shot. The only James/Narcissa I've ever read, but way better than many L/J I've read.

Author's Response: I'm also a huge L/J shipper (it's my favourite pairing of all), so this was interesting for me to write. I'm glad you enjoyed it, despite the couple of mistakes you found... I can't believe I didn't pick up on the fact that they shouldn't be able to apparate if they're 16. Yikes! Thanks for the lovely review and I'm sorry that it took me so long to reply. =)

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