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Review:onestop_hpfan18 says:
I actually enjoyed this final chapter more. Not only were there fewer (if any at all) grammar mistakes, but I felt more emotion from Lily in this one. You show more character dimension in her than you did in the first chapter as she thinks of how she hands to let Teddy go. However, the bit that threw me was that you wrote this chapter in second person, while the first chapter was in third person. I think it should be more constant and all in one perspective. I think it should all be in second person because it worked so well in this second chapter that I think it can work wonders in improving the first chapter. But alas, it's still a good story despite the change in perspectives. Good job. (:

Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter! I was so afraid to try this second person POV seeing as I'd never done it before, but I'm so glad it worked out. When I come to think about it, it would make more sense if the first chapter in second person POV. I'm seriously considering changing now! Thanks so much for the lovely reviews, Leslie!

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