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Review:Salem says:
Hey there! Agnes from the forums bringing your review. I decided to read over this after all since I found some extra time even though it was a bit longer than I would have liked. But I'm glad I did!

Now, I'm not one to typically read this pairing, but the way you describe it is just so natural and smooth. I really, really like the approach you took towards this one-shot, too. It still focuses on the war, on the importance of the betrayal of Lily and James and all of the confusion surrounding the issue, yet at the same time manages to involve the relationship between Sirius and Remus. I think the plot flowed very well.

I also really like how you included their skills at making magical maps--it really came in handy for them.

The only thing that made me iffy is the characterization of Remus in the beginning--I just can't imagine him swearing, but that's just me. I suppose the situation called for it, in any case.

And I'm not sure, but this may be a spelling mistake-- "as if they could mould and bend together as one."--should that 'bend' be 'blend' instead?

Overall, I think this was very heartwarming despite all of the angst and mistrust. It all came together perfectly at the end. Sigh. If only it could have happened this way in the series.

Author's Response: Hi Agnes! I'm sorry about the length - you said you preferred stories with word counts less than 3K but I wasn't sure if that was just a "preference" or something that you stuck to strictly as a rule. Thanks for stopping by, though!

I'm glad this pairing worked for you in this fic. That's my goal! I don't want to turn everyone into crazy slash-lovers but I want people to have an understanding of the type of relationship two men can have together and at least feel somewhat comfortable reading it. I know it isn't for everyone though.

I often times focus on the war in my stories, about the loss and grief and the tragedy of it all, and I don't focus on their relationship. So that was something new I was trying with this fic. Good to see it worked well.

I loved the idea of them using their cartography skills to find Peter. They were able to create a map that tracked every inhabitant of Hogwarts...why not create a map to find one person they were searching for? It makes me wonder how Sirius found Peter in the first place that next day...

When I was writing it, I'll admit that the cursing felt unnatural coming from Remus. I usually have Sirius swearing and it definitely is something I can see him doing...but I found it suited the tone of the story. Remus can't have spent all that time with Sirius and not picked up on something. ;)

No, I meant bend. I was just trying to convey the idea of them being like one entity - that they were molded together and could move as one. Does that make sense?

This was definitely one of my 'happier' fics so I'm glad you found it heartwarming. This is definitely something I wish had happened in canon - at least the idea of Harry never going to live with the evil magic-hating Dursleys and Harry never really getting the chance to know his godfather the way he should have.

Thanks for the review! I really appreciate it. :)


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