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Review:Aiedail says:
I've never even considered this pairing before! Which is odd, maybe, because they were in Dumbledore's Army together. I like their banter as well--it's well-put, sometimes a little too drawn out for me personally, but it's fitting to their relationship and gives us a really good idea of what their characters are like.

I can get into Ginny's mind here--you feel that she is irked not only because Zach is rude to her, but because while her world is crumbling around her and she can do nothing about it, Quidditch is like her escape from reality. And then here ZS is, being a nuisance. I also like that she's dutifully enraged at the prospects of treating a Quaffle like a cushion. I know that as a writer I'd be horrified if someone was using like, expensive stationery as scratch paper or something similar!

And...oh dear, men and their hygiene! Although I've never personally met a guy who wears socks he hasn't washed in two years D:

It's a bit hard to imagine--students being allowed out and about while the Death Eaters were reigning over Hogwarts--but creative licence is a beautiful thing heh. I think it's a nice little story you have; your writing is good, although I'd always recommend a couple well-placed commas and an extra look-over to pick out unnecessary words before posting. :) Overall wonderful job, though! :D

-lily

Author's Response: Hi Lily, how're you going? You spell your name the same as my daughter, that's cool :)

Thanks for your review, much appreciated and thank you for your honesty. I'll have to get around to investigating during a re-read or something when I get the time. Thanks for the heads up. I'm glad you enjoyed this though (and clearly you've never met my brother - he inspired the sock thing, ew I know!) and thanks for taking the time to review in depth, really appreciate it :) Bobby xx


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